"The Government's investment in art, music and theatre is wasted of money. Governmnet should invenst these funds in public services instead". To what extend do you agree with this statement?
The government has supported art, music and theatre in the nation. Union have been wasted of capital fund, to advance in several parts fild of craft, soul and drama because that is useless to have to do, government have to make priority to urgent necessities. I disagree that the government has been supported art, music and theatre in the nation.
To begin with, development country needs capital fund in the other necessities, such as infrastructure, education department, building up the economics, and several part that have more urgention of the nation. The government received of fund with debt, when public sectore not be discovered by nation, absolutly governtment add a number of debt that can meke higher debt for supported art, music and theatre that is not priority to nation.
Furtheremore, to improve the infrastructure instead, the government must to debt. Development is not maximal to make a priority, beside of primary and secondary needs by country. Several part country, expecially district has not equal, getting from district that far from city country have lower development of economics than central district. Although, many people missunderstanding and tendencialy to judge directly. Example, sidewalks was not totaly usefull because broken in other part and the strom sewer that get hang up by trash and many of public service that not maximal discovered by the government. The government might not give the best convlusion to obtein public fund for support art, music and theatre.
In conclusion, the government was supporting art, music and theatre that wasted public fund, but in the several part of department is not maximal discovered by the nation, finally the government should be optimal to the other part of department in the nation that more urgention in the several part such as, infrastructure development, increasing human resources in the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'several parts'.
Suggestion: several parts
...artment, building up the economics, and several part that have more urgention of the nation....
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'several parts'.
Suggestion: several parts
...tre that wasted public fund, but in the several part of department is not maximal discovered...
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'several parts'.
Suggestion: several parts
...n the nation that more urgention in the several part such as, infrastructure development, in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, second, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3023255814 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93804564776 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468438538206 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.1535602001 49.4020404114 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17147515327 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778121353513 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609246182734 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120089932914 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266184791534 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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