Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A growing number of people believe that governments ought to increase expenditures on railways than on roads. I am totally in favour of this idea and this essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.

On the one hand, proponents of roads claim that this type of infrastructure can make the lives of consumers very convenient. As the roads are usually built close to buildings, goods and merchandisers can be distributed at the doorways, which can eventually save time and money of the shoppers. In addition, constructions of paths prove how people dwelling in rural areas can extremely benefit because highways act as a bridge between cities and villages. Therefore, generally speaking, such expressways become a source of economy for villagers since they manage to sell their agricultural food products namely oranges, apples as well as live stocks such as hens, goats and the rest others.

On the other hand, I would argue that building railways becomes even considerably advantageous than roads. Moreover, roadways get extremely dangerous when it is a rainy season because the ways are pooled with excess water, so the vehicles are likely to slip easily and involve in dreadful accidents. Unlike in railways, passengers tend to feel safe as the framework of train lines normally goes underground making the track favourable for all seasons. Also, passengers can reach their destinations in time since the schedules are always fixed and regular, which prove highly beneficial for official workers. Whereas in roadways, drivers do not follow the regular time table and therefore many passengers fail to arrive to a terminal in time.

In conclusion, taking into consideration of potential perilous casualties of roadways, the government need to allocate budgets to railways as they are safe and get good in any type of climate.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27118644068 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86304049252 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657627118644 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0295472118 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.583333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11545343925 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418354420881 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368438290801 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077317847278 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477831425072 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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On the other hand, I would argue that building railways becomes even considerably advantageous than roads. Moreover, roadways get extremely dangerous when it is a rainy season
On the other hand, I would argue that building railways becomes even considerably advantageous than roads. First, roadways get extremely dangerous when it is a rainy season //first, then moreover

Unlike in railways, passengers tend to feel safe as the framework of train lines normally goes underground
In railways, passengers tend to feel safe as the framework of train lines normally goes underground

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1510 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.119 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.782 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.157 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

Dear sir, can I replace "unlike" by "whereas" as follows:

Unlike in railways, passengers tend to feel safe as the framework of train lines normally goes underground making the track favourable for all seasons.

Whereas in railways, passengers tend to feel safe as the framework of train lines normally goes underground making the track favourable for all seasons.

And why it is unsuitable to use unlike sir?
I look forward to your reply. Thank you sir.