The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the total number of queries made by the tourist at Tourist Information Office in a particular city in between Jan 2011 to June 2011.
The enquiries were made in through letter or email, telephone or in person. The highest number of enquiries were made in person whereas the least were made through letter. Overall, the queries for information increased in given time frame.
Enquiries made in person and through telephone increased over a period of time. The number of person who reached the office to seek the information increased from just over 400 on January to 1900 on June. Similarly, the telephonic enquiries increased to 1600 on June 2011 from 900 on January 2011. Despite overall increase in the number of telephonic questions from tourist, it saw the downfall in the month of February.
The questions made through email or messages decreased over a period of time. It reduced almost by the half fold in given time frame with about 400 enquiries on June 2011.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...etter or email, telephone or in person. The highest number of enquiries were made i...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... and through telephone increased over a period of time. The number of person who reached the o...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ough email or messages decreased over a period of time. It reduced almost by the half fold in ...
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Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with about 400 enquiries on June 2011.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
similarly, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 24.0651302605 8% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 828.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 168.0 315.596192385 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92857142857 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55606078019 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 176.041082164 45% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 255.6 506.74238477 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9799923018 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.8 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219120807807 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980142139334 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633658721709 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15040776557 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777112108234 0.056905535591 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 78.4519038076 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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