IELTS 6 Test 1 Writing Task 2 Academic You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are s

Nowadays, commercial appear everywhere and plays an important role in promoting company's budget. Many people think that consumers are effected by advertising than by their demand to buy some mass commodities. I strongly agree with this opinion.
Firstly, increasing smart gadget prompts media being popular. Actually, a person may have at least a phone, I believe that. So people are exposed to commercials inevitable through some popular social media they are utilizing such as Facebook, YouTube, TikTok,... because that is compulsory to continue seeing your favorite programs. Over the long time of exposure, the perpetual ads would effect on consumers' subconscious to buy the same thing when they go to supermarket.
Secondly, a part of the higher consumption is from young people who are admiring some influencer advertising. May be a sport or entertainment celebrities tale park in a advertising to prominence a commodities, which manipulates their fans to purchase it. For example, an idol name Rose, member of Black Pink was registered as an brand ambassador of Tiffany & Co, that will attract her fans to use that product.
In conclusion, I believe that Ads tool and new form of commercial would definitely effect on the higher rate of consumption goods that a consumers do not need but they still buy.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...lizing such as Facebook, YouTube, TikTok,... because that is compulsory to continu...
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Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...me of exposure, the perpetual ads would effect on consumers subconscious to buy the sa...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...miring some influencer advertising. May be a sport or entertainment celebrities ta...
^^
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... entertainment celebrities tale park in a advertising to prominence a commodities...
^
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a commodity' or simply 'commodities'?
Suggestion: a commodity; commodities
...ale park in a advertising to prominence a commodities, which manipulates their fans to purcha...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... member of Black Pink was registered as an brand ambassador of Tiffany & Co, that ...
^^
Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...new form of commercial would definitely effect on the higher rate of consumption goods...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consumer' or simply 'consumers'?
Suggestion: a consumer; consumers
...e higher rate of consumption goods that a consumers do not need but they still buy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1102.0 1615.20841683 68% => OK
No of words: 211.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22274881517 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99519016347 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.710900473934 0.561755894193 127% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5127431876 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0840415679856 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273814123518 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025708490513 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519613730002 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204481991449 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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