Some people believe that successful professional athletes’ extremely higher earnings when compared to their counterparts in other prominent fields is completely convincing, while others oppose of this and argue it is unjust. Before jumping into the conclusion, I am going to investigate both points of view thoroughly.
On the one hand, it is understandable that outstanding sportspeople should receive a great payment for the reasons listed below. As a matter of fact, they must put in all-out efforts and train extremely hard on a daily basis in order to keep in an impeccable form. What is more, in addition to being required to have an exceptional physical strength, those athletes are constantly under intense pressure about mental aspect as a result of high expectations of their supporters. Additionally, when competing, they are always highly at risk to have permanent injuries which result in a wide range of long-term consequences, including disability or even loss of career. Hence, sports professionals deserve to have a high income.
On the other hand, those who labour in other paramount areas ought to be compensated with a better disbursement for their remarkable dedication to society. Without a doubt, other occupations play a crucial role in the development of both intellectual and physical aspect of the society. To illustrate, individuals in health sector, such as doctors and nurses, work incredibly hard to ensure that patients' needs are met, even if it means putting their health in peril. As another example, astronauts who take responsibility for observing the universe from space can only get the salary of 7000 dollars, which is 50 times less in comparison with that of Messi- a successful football player, irregardless of working in an extremely corrosive environment.
To sum up, professional athletes should receive a great amount of money for their significant attempts; meanwhile, others in vital jobs need to to receive higher payments thanks to the practical values they bring to society. From my perspective, I do believe that on no account should we be biased towards any jobs, everyone had better be reasonably paid as long as we contribute good things to the community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, while, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26271186441 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06824007574 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624293785311 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4918949526 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.307692308 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146810804187 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496617024042 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607942143121 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972754867109 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759796713535 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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