Inviduals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that new evolutions which change the world can be carried out by individuals. Although I partly agree with this opinion, I think that it is more effective when the government or large academic centers conduct those new developments.
On one hand, there are many examples prove that great products can come from a single person such as Facebook from Mark Zuckerberg or Window operating system from Bill Gate. However, the number of those talented people in our society is very small as can be described as “one in millions”. Furthermore, each person can hardly create several breakthrough products in their whole life because they have to improve every single creation many times before it can be complete. As a result, those products that have important impact to our life will be very limited in quantity.
On the other hand, governments and big academies have plenty of advantages to bring new ideas to real life. The most significant strong points are manpower which is a large number of people skilled in various fields and technologies with latest modern machines that help new proposals to be considered and done much more easier and faster.These upsides would help to improve our world with creations that are good in both quality and quantity. A good example is in architecture firms, the concepts can come from one person such as Zaha Hadid or Frank Lloyd Wright, but their buildings cannot be real without a lot of staffs who developed those ideas with newest materials and construction methods.
In conclusion, no one can deny those notable works done by individuals, but I strongly believe that administration and academic organizations should take the main roles on the way to enhance our world.
- Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children s development so it should be compulsory in high school Do you agree or disagree 73
- Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life? 73
- Many people believe that schools should teach children to become good citizens and workers rather than independent individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and relevant examples. 78
- Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children s development so it should be compulsory in high school Do you agree or disagree 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ant strong points are manpower which is a large number of people skilled in various fields and te...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...lled in various fields and technologies with latest modern machines that help new proposals...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...roposals to be considered and done much more easier and faster.These upsides would help to ...
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Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...ed and done much more easier and faster.These upsides would help to improve our world...
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Line 5, column 651, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the newest'.
Suggestion: with the newest
...lot of staffs who developed those ideas with newest materials and construction methods. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07638888889 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75364517111 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597222222222 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.8445544213 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.2 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169874066072 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721083723895 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373299228288 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10714320013 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500891947008 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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