It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
A host of people find taking risk exceedingly important, both in their careers and private lives. Although I recognise the drawbacks of doing something whose possibility to fail is high, I would argue that they are outweighed by the benefits.
There are some drawbacks of taking risks related to our professions and personal lives. One obvious disadvantage of this is that we may have fiscal adversities when the failure comes. For instance, when we run a startup which costs a tremendous amount of money but it is not a successful one, it is clear that we will have to pay a large debt, and in turn, we might have an impoverished life after this failure. Another example is that the conglomerate of my friend's uncle has been bankrupted after having failed when they took the risk to provide a project with a huge amount of capital investment although it was a high-profile enterprise in the southern region of Vietnam. Another drawback is that our private life is likely to be heavily affected from taking risks. Unless we succeed, we will have to face a range of criticisms from our friends or relatives and this can result in distress.
However, I would argue that taking risks is more likely to have positive impacts. In my opinion, it does wonders for our careers and personal lives. It is true that if we want to be successful, we have to become different from other people. For example, Samsung has been out of their comfort zone when they manufacture a folder smartphone and a number of people said that it would beget a loss of a huge amount of money for this well-known technology business. However, it was one of their most rewarding plans that brought a huge income and made Samsung be light-years ahead of other competitors in terms of producing this type of mobile phone. Furthermore, taking risks also makes us dominate other counterparts or candidates when we take part in a recruitment or expressing our opinions. This is due to the fact that when we become different from the others and it makes other people impressed, our works or answers in a recruitment will take precedence over the other's and lead to a breakthrough in our private lives or occupations.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential benefits of taking risks is more significant than the possible harms.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7694235589 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77336840126 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501253132832 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6656554661 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.9375 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229753056264 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859278427233 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743375420241 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158736962533 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591550186949 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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