It is more important to spend more public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is imperative to focus on raising funds to encourage a healthy lifestyle so that people can be protected from diseases instead of curing them of an illness. I partly agree with this opinion for two main reasons.
On the one hand, prevention helps lighten the burden that patients put on the medical system and government. If people are healthy, they will not need treatment from doctors or nurses. In view of the global outbreak of Covid-19, citizens are encouraged to get vaccinated and be conscious of wearing masks in public simultaneously. This way not only makes dwellers become resistant to this novel virus but also minimizes the incidence of Covid-19. This also ensures that hospitals can provide infected patients with enough medical care and ultimately cure them. In addition, compared with the prevention, the cost of treatment is high. In other words, the government spends a major expense to equip the hospitals. Take the example of ventilators, which produced by the company of Vietnam’s richest man Pham Nhat Vuong cost around $7000 in Vietnam. However, if people have a healthy lifestyle and do not suffer from diseases, the government will save an amount of money. Therefore, patients are no longer burdens to the health care and government.
On the other hand, there are some congenital diseases that a healthy lifestyle can not prevent such as heart disease or down syndrome. These diseases can be inherited by parents and patients with genetic diseases may experience a disability throughout life. In another case, many unpredictable emergencies can occur, namely, traffic collisions or electric shocks. If the government concentrated mainly on prevention and ignores the investment in urgent healthcare, the death toll from these unintentional injuries would be increasing out of control.
In conclusion, the government should strike a balance between a healthy life and adequate health care and motivates citizens to keep a strict watch on their health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25867507886 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85215373381 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615141955836 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2378963981 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0588235294 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110387746118 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340914300248 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367663008943 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595266361187 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302008415288 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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