It is believed that books, films, and the internet are preferable media to learn about other culture than traveling directly to the places. I strongly disagree with this idea because learning from the first-hand will give us more insight and experiences that the media could not give.
Nowadays, various media such as books, films, and the internet have provide us a lot of information including foreign culture from different areas or countries. This is could be beneficial for us who do not have enough time or money for traveling. We can just stay at home enjoying our leisure time while learning new culture from other people. For example, I easily know from K-drama (Korean films series) that Korean people usually celebrating their birthday with enjoying traditional seaweed soup because the soup reflecting longer and happier live hope. Additionally, I learn that in the USA, it is normal for boy and girl age 18 years old or above to move to their own flats. However, learning from the medias will not give us special and memorable experience as equal as if we traveling directly to the places.
Traveling and may be staying for days or moths in some new places will make us learn a lot of different culture and way of life. Not only learning but also experiencing and somehow applying the culture. For instance, my cousin last year visited Japan for a month. After went back to Indonesia, she became a story teller about how Japanese parents teach their children to be well organized and clean. She said that children age 5 years or above in Japan always get used to be independently responsible with their room cleanliness and they will also get punished to become reckless. Same experience happened to me when I visited my friend last year at one University in Tokyo. I learned that student in laboratory normally go home after their professor left. Hence, if the professor decides to stay at laboratory, all the students also stay there.
In conclusion, visiting directly to the places will give us more real lesson and experience about the different culture compared to only learning it from medias.
- The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013 61
- Nowadays more people would rather purchase food than cook at home What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend 56
- The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012 78
- Many people believe that it is a good idea to have a dress code at work place Do you agree or disagree with statement 67
- Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree 67
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Suggestion: provided
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Suggestion: it
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pared to only learning it from medias.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91086350975 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57916758482 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551532033426 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9249295554 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.705882353 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253694483089 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823157184702 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819777473887 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167887744035 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068211755794 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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