It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. (1) However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. (2)
Sports and Art may be thought of as fundamentally different activities, yet have some resemblance as both domains have a participatory and spectatorial aspect.. (Background statement) While some believe that being naturally gifted will help excel in these fields, there are people who have performed remarkable feats, through sheer dedication and discipline. (Paraphrase)This essay will discuss both views objectively, before arriving at a conclusion. (Thesis).
(Topic Statement) At a glance, some people are prodigious in certain fields right from their formative years. With adequate encouragement these individuals show impressive mastery in their field of choice and this is usually identified by either parents or teachers, who skilfully dominate a particular activity in primary school competitions; be it art or sport. (Reason) (Example) For instance, Sachin Tendulkar joined the National cricket team of India at a surprisingly young age of 17, and has outperformed many in this sport. (Connecting Statement) There is no doubt that his unquestionable innate talent since his childhood has made him incredibly popular, earning him the moniker, “God of Cricket ''.
(Topic Statement) On deeper inspection, both fields are quite deman
ding in terms of practice, while art expresses feelings and state of mind, one can plausibly assert that sport is a form of art. Though there are numerous examples of natural talent in these areas it definitely is not a central dogma. Reason Ultimately success in any field depends on personal interest and the passion he/she has to eventually succeed , by rigorously training to achieve perfection. Example To cite an example, star shuttle player Miss P V Sindhu, had a humble beginning but, her perseverance and laser focused dedication made her the first indian woman to rightfully earn a silver medal in the olympics.
In conclusion, this essay has aptly emphasized that ‘hard work pays off’ and that anyone can achieve their desired outcome, provided that they have an ambition to achieve.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... a participatory and spectatorial aspect.. Background statement While some believe...
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...dibly popular, earning him the moniker, “God of Cricket . Topic Statement On d...
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Suggestion: .
...earning him the moniker, “God of Cricket . Topic Statement On deeper inspection...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hile art expresses feelings and state of mind, one can plausibly assert that spor...
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Line 6, column 131, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...bly assert that sport is a form of art. Though there are numerous examples of natural ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...passion he/she has to eventually succeed , by rigorously training to achieve perfe...
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Line 6, column 379, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'achieving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: achieving
...tually succeed , by rigorously training to achieve perfection. Example To cite an example,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45396825397 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95087436954 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67619047619 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0949352484 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.166666667 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208994440794 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641428776447 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048316494757 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917816643517 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458105567317 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.