It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
there has been many statements against the violence elements on tv shows in recent years. it is believed to have brought tremendous impacts to the society as a whole, and the majority argues that this should be alleviated. I concur with such an idea.
To begin with, youngsters especially teenagers are easily effected by the things broadcasted by the media. young children enjoy imitating the images on tv because in their reflections, such images look awesome. For example, if teenagers try smoking or drinking pertain to the actions of an particular actor or actress on the scree, this will turn into a bad habit. this habit, however, will eventually be nurtured day by day. Although it may seem harmless to the society, the insidious effects of such is considerable. Drunk people can hardly control the behaviors, therefore, they may injure others unconsciously.
Furthermore, nowadays, most of the tv programs are criminal shows. Several famous series of films show on tv during prime time like “murder in the first” or “how to get away with murder”. Despite of attractive plot, such films contain many criminal elements which is unsuitable for the young, and they are still able to watch those. By virtue of that, there has been an incline in the number of illegal action which is caculated on the worldwide scale. like many cases in Vietnam, various teenagers committed a crime as an early age due to the effect of violence movies.
To sum up, for all the reasons mentioned above, I deem that shows, programs or films which include criminal or violence scenes should be mitigated on the screen. Instead, more educational program shall be integrated on the tv so as to educate youngsters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0701754386 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77456237416 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628070175439 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9714169001 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3125 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163417220059 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508737177247 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335964092685 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104615338136 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300780628675 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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