Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both parents and schools are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Nowadays, young generation frequently tend to have an unhealthy way of life. Therefore, I am convinced that this problem can be solved by their parents and schools.
There are a variety of reasons why parents have to be responsible for caring of their children’s style of living. First and foremost, parents do not have enough time to teach their children. To be more specific, family plays a vital role in growing up of a child, and without being cared, children could be educated in wrong ways which leads to negative manner of living. In addition, children were brought up by their parents, so it is easier to impact in children’s behaviour. For example, if children have some troubles in their life, encouragement of their caregivers will be effective to relieve children’s stress.
Besides, schools also plays an important role in looking after students because of following reasons. Firstly, the old-fashioned system leave extra burdens on student’s score and achievement. As a matter of fact, kids spend most of their time in school, if they have to get high scores, they will be competitive with their friends by unfair ways. Therefore, educating about standards of morality for young adults is nescessary. Secondly, school schedules are not flexible and short of extra- curriculum activities. As a result, if school environment is not suitable, it will cause detrimental effects on young men and women.
In conclusion, there has been an celebrating trend towards an unhealthy style of living. In my point of view, I agree with the idea that both parents and educational need to share the responsibility of dealing with this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 31, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...women. In conclusion, there has been an celebrating trend towards an unhealthy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1962962963 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02087161179 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618518518519 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5393007269 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264278697163 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871523827924 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644060920694 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173537859083 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641398961022 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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