In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
In a present-day society of distinct countries, people have yet to reach a consensus on a faulty idea of which adolescents are currently involved in some paid occupations while others are briefly advocating it due to the diversity of worth-absorbing knowledge and outlook paid work offered. In the essay, I will analyze my viewpoints on this phenomenon thereby adding weight to the belief that working from an early age is inappropriate.
On the one hand, there are several undeniable potentials from a plethora of consequences that emerged when adolescents are increasingly engaged in salaried jobs. First, premature children immersed in work can gain the proper awareness of a staff's responsibility as well as the obstacles encountered in the working environment. Thus, they will accomplish self-consciousness about the flow of money and cherish their earnings, thereby obtaining a comprehensive development and becoming financially secure when growing up. In addition, teenagers from shortcoming income families basically take jobs as a way to financially support their parents by affording living expenses such as monthly expenditures to enhance their living conditions. However, they are not fully equipped with formal educational qualifications and haven't achieved tertiary education, which means the lack of academic knowledge emerges as a barrier for them to be enrolled in white-collar occupations. Consequently, they will opt for working in other positions which acquire greater strain and endeavor with no valuable experiences at all. By this way, this leads to several drawbacks affecting the future of children.
Firstly, being employed in manual jobs does not compromise their educational journey and future career prospects as its nature of work offers no theory and expertise, thereby making no sense in their personal development. This not only leads to the diversion of attention from academic pursuits but also easily gets teenagers to flock to the flow of money and ignore completing assignments or having little engagement in extra-curricular activities. As a consequence, their overall academic performance could be negatively affected. Lower grades and incomplete coursework might hinder their ability to pursue higher education and subsequently impact their career opportunities. Additionally, there are also situations when kids are heavily exploited by employers, forcing them to work for long hours with extremely low wages. With little awareness, they can undergo a number of kind of physical injury or even psychological disorders which heavily affected their entire life.
In conclusion, the disadvantages of this phenomenon surely outweigh the advantages of enrolling youth in paid work. Government should have certain rules or limitations for a number of businesses, not letting them exploit children and creating a good environment for juvenile to grow.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'staffs'' or 'staff's'?
Suggestion: staffs'; staff's
...work can gain the proper awareness of a staffs responsibility as well as the obstacles...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...ally support their parents by affording living expenses such as monthly expenditures t...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 817, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...h formal educational qualifications and havent achieved tertiary education, which mean...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 433.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68822170901 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23416186594 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61662817552 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8198970166 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.882352941 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4705882353 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226400631752 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651821022043 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557563703292 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136705252677 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420328375666 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.57 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 78.4519038076 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.