Residents have sparked off an argument over imprisonment, in which it is believed to be less efficient than education in tackling crimes. While I accept that an improvement in education is advantageous, I opine that a prison sentence also exert positive influences on wrongdoers.
On the one hand, a pedagogical approach plays a pivotal role in eradicating evils because of two major reasons. Firstly, only by education will moral and cultural values be instilled into learners’ mind. Therefore, this is expected to shape their patterns of behavior and create dignified citizens, who can embrace social fabrics, as well as fight against any criminal behavior. Secondly, education, which integrates regulations and legal terms into curricula, also helps social members entirely grasp the importance of obeying the law. Thus, it is safe to say that if people are sufficiently provided with such lessons, they are less likely to turn into crimes.
On the other hand, benefits brought about by imprisonment should not be overlooked. Indeed, serving a prison sentence, offenders will receive a harsh corporal punishment, and this may leave an indelible impression that crimes are treated by the full weight of the law. In other word, such rigorous experience is reckoned to make offenders see the error of their way, and deter them from perpetuating evils. For example, in a recent study conducted among British juvenile delinquents, 80% of total population reported that serving a custodial sentence necessitates them being law-abiding citizens due to a severe consequence they suffered in prisons. In contrast, if imprisonment is abolished, not only will this cause obstacle to maintaining the policy of zero tolerance, but also result in a lack of strategies for punishing wrongdoers.
In brief, while not disavowing the significance of education, it seems to me that imprisonment is also essential in assuring social tranquility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sential in assuring social tranquility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in brief, in contrast, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44701986755 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07635140795 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645695364238 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7064829171 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.538461538 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7692307692 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108935951047 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374766469968 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359955607733 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0613587858407 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235845189139 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.32 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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