In many countries, teenagers have a part time jobs when they are still at school. Do you think it is a good idea? Use reasons and example to support your view.
In recent year, there is a trend that many students work part time while they are still at school. It is believed that teenagers chose this activity for several reasons.
Firstly, this activity helps teenagers earn some money. There are many things which teenagers need to pay during school time such as material books, clothes, accommodation, party, just to name of few. Besides, all finance support from their parents might not meet their demand because not all teenagers come from wealthy family. Therefore, money earned from working part-time is really useful for them. As a result, teenagers might be less dependent on their family.
Another benefit of working part-time is that teenagers can manage time effectively. There are several things teenagers have to do at school such as report, essay, projects like things and also spending time for friends, party, part-time jobs. It is needed to know how to use harmony time for both school and other things. Hence, teenagers will know how to make a priority plan to do things faster and convenient for themselves.
Some people who argue that working part-time will lead students negligence of study at school and therefore they get bad results at the end of the course. However, I do not think this idea is valid. This is because if teenagers work part-time at companies which relate to their major they will get more experience in their fields. For example, IT students can work part time for IT company, they can practice what they learned at school such as analysis data, writing software, set up website like things. As a result, students will broaden their knowledge in their field and it is a good way for their success career.
In conclusion, I would like to say that working part-time will bring some benefit for teenagers.
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flaws:
No. of Different Words: 164 200 //You have good ideas, but need more vocabulary words. Follow this user who has good language:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1442 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.791 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.303 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.533 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.355 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...here is a trend that many students work part time while they are still at school. It is b...
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Line 4, column 365, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...elds. For example, IT students can work part time for IT company, they can practice what ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.286135693215 0.247107183377 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.153392330383 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0619469026549 0.0946595960268 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0383480825959 0.0501214627716 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0589970501475 0.0437548338989 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129793510324 0.122226691241 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0265486725664 0.0403226058552 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.41597918906 2.80594681477 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0265486725664 0.0326793684256 81% => OK
Particles: 0.00294985250737 0.00163938923432 180% => OK
Determiners: 0.0530973451327 0.0861772015684 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0324483775811 0.021408717616 152% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0206489675516 0.011925033212 173% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1787.0 1933.35771543 92% => OK
No of words: 301.0 316.048096192 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93687707641 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365448504983 0.374742101984 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275747508306 0.28420135186 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166112956811 0.203846283523 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0963455149502 0.137316102897 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41597918906 2.80594681477 86% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.037074148 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531561461794 0.56093040696 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.3453650583 60.7387585426 89% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.7058823529 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8447017862 49.517814964 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.117647059 127.492653851 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7058823529 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.814263465372 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 45.2806331835 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.76470588235 1.69124875643 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396042879312 0.332605444948 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105529554943 0.102741220458 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0961387021764 0.0668466124924 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524557444264 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18051478039 0.148594505496 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138826655625 0.134430193775 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692021531316 0.0742795772207 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.243731202529 0.324371583561 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0595494738463 0.0638462369009 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23206367228 0.228012699653 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076957470123 0.058150111329 132% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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