Science study shows that manufactured food and drink contain a large quantity of sugar, which can possibly jeopardize human beings’ health. Some people consider increasing the price of sugary products as a way to lessen people’s consumption of sugar. However, I don’t think this will work out.
It is no doubt that eating too much sugar that is in highly processed food rather than in natural food is unhealthy. Taking too much sugar will accelerate human beings’ ageing. Also, according to medical handbooks that I read, it can lead to obesity and heart attack, which is harmful to individuals’ life quality. The large consumption of manufactured food of citizens would finally result in an extremely high medical payout of governments.
Nevertheless, using the strategy of higher prices may not help to achieve the goal of less consumption of sugar. Most people hate to be forced to do something, especially in a way that will add their life burden. And it can not be guaranteed that people will buy less manufactured food rather than quit the gym to save money for the food they want.
In addition, I think it is unfair for the poor to add the price of high-sugar food. In my opinion, only after meeting their basic needs can people then pursue something higher. For the poor, the most vital thing is not to starve. And the increasing price of certain prices would not lead them to healthier and more expensive food but make them feel that life gets harder. It only benefits the food sellers.
To sum up, the idea of cutting the consumption of sugar by increasing the food price is not realistic. It would not only be not inefficient but also enhance the inequality between the rich and the poor. It would be better to encourage people to eat healthier food by propaganda or giving them some free meal tickets of food with less sugar.
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- The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone Do you agree or disagree 67
- Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 68
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- Students in school should learn practical skills like car maintenance and managing a bank account in addition to academic subjects Do you agree or disagree 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ontain a large quantity of sugar, which can possibly jeopardize human beings’ health. Some p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, i think, in addition, no doubt, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81875 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60525310671 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528125 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6554803565 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6666666667 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283051085863 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862697016121 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640341459548 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169478320955 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573512333926 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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