Many people are against training dolphins to perform in the circus because it may injure these animals. Do you agree or disagree? Why?
The entertainment industry is developing day by day, and many kinds of animals are considered as performances in the concert, especially is dolphin – a friendly estimable animal. They’re so gentle that lots of tourists are keen on them. But after a short time this new kind of entertainment is created, a number of people are against training dolphin so as not to injure these animals. This is just the idea come from people’s benevelence, but according to me, it’s absolutely right.
Dolphin, like us, should be protected, be respected. Why such an intelligent, friendly animal is trained to become a tool in the concert? There’s no reason for this issue. Eventhough you can say that when they are being trained, they can live in a better condition, their exact inhabitant is still the ocean. Let them be their hometown! Because of the fact that dolphin is a brainy animal, many local or international centers use them as the assistants to help people in the beach. It’s ok because now the problem relate to life, it’s definitely essential. But these two problems are different, don’t compare them. Imagine you are caught by a strange creature to be a joke in the concert, what will you think? So terrible, right? So much as they don’t have the way of thinking like us, don’t treat them like that. When I visit a new place, coming to the concert to see dolphin is just a very small part of my plan, that means it won’t affect anything if I don’t do that. I’ll be still happy with my friends and my family, we can play the other games, visit many different sightseeing or something like that. I know many people have the opinion likewise.
I hope that after reading, if you didn’t agree with the problem, you could change your mind. Maybe it can’t make the problem change in one or two days, but in the future, more dolphin can inhabit wherever they want, the number of dolphins in the concert will descrease.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 342, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: Because
... the ocean. Let them be their hometown! Because of the fact that dolphin is a brainy animal, many local ...
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Line 2, column 679, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ine you are caught by a strange creature to be a joke in the concert, what will y...
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Line 2, column 895, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it a new place, coming to the concert to see dolphin is just a very small part of...
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Line 2, column 1104, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[4]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sightseeing seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much different sightseeing', 'a good deal of different sightseeing'.
Suggestion: much different sightseeing; a good deal of different sightseeing
...ily, we can play the other games, visit many different sightseeing or something like that. I know many peo...
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Line 2, column 1104, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ily, we can play the other games, visit many different sightseeing or something like that. I k...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, may, so, still, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83529411765 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78092862437 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579411764706 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.384769539078 780% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7213843983 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5263157895 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21052631579 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20005835554 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608707738566 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603314090626 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139812137344 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395511057136 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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