Many people around the world believe that competition is important, while others say it has its drawbacks. Do you think the positives of competition outweigh the negatives?
It is irrefutable that competition has augmented in every walk of life in the today's world. It is argued by many people that competition is crucial for everyone; however, others believe that it has negative consequences. Despite of having drawbacks of competition, In my opinion, I believe that it has more positives compared to its negatives.
Admittedly, there are some basic negatives of competition. First and foremost, it can lead people to negativity. What I mean, after doing a lot of hardwork, sometimes people are not able to win the competition. So, people think that they are not capable and it affects their self-esteem. In extreme cases, it can take people towards severe problems like depression. For instance, New York Times revealed that Olympians may have feeling of depression as they lost in the competition. Another is, it creates too much pressure on people. Having more competition on workplaces, schools and so on. Individuals always try to compete with each other. Hence, they might not be able to bear such kind of pressure.
Nevertheless, in spite of the disadvantage above, I believe that competition has potential benefits too. Firstly, it can help us to boost our self-confidence. In other words, owning to competition, people will excel their capacity and go beyond their level. Eventually, they will gain confidence. Secondly, it proffers motivation to folks for doing works. For instance, in schools, students have competitive atmosphere. Therefore, it will encourage them to study harder. Moreover, people are able to assess their strengths and weaknesses. By knowing our weaknesses, peole will have a chance to improve it. Consequently, individuals may increase their quality of work. Lastly, competition can give us better choice. Because of increasing competition between different companies, people can get better quality of products at reasonable prices.
Having said that, gaining confidence and motivation far outweigh any of minor negatives that competition brings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i mean, kind of, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44089456869 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0769045663 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61661341853 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2448898634 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.5 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.0384615385 20.7667163134 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.42307692308 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285253779866 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661640731098 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641844529368 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190660380519 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927444142418 0.056905535591 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.2 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.38 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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