Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes?

Nowadays, due to globalization, a significant increase in the number of overseas tourism is witnessed. Although the obvious benefits it brings to the development of a country, its drawbacks can not be denied since it affects negatively to the local habitat. In my opinion, the government play a vital role in the reducing of these prejudices.

To begin with, due to the low-level awareness of the minority tourists, the local resident afraid that it will affect negatively to the environment which threatens their habitat. For example, a substantial rise is witnessed in the number of waste products into water such as lakes and rivers which is the water source of the whole village. Thus, drinking such an contaminated water cause numerous serious disease. Furthermore, an overwhelming in the number of tourists also shorten the lifetime of some ancient building.

In my opinion, visiting a new country not only help an individual gain valuable experience and unforgettable memories but also contributing to boosting the national economy. Therefore, the government should take actions to improve the reputation of tourist attraction places. First, promoting a campaign to raise the local resident awareness about the opportunities that tourism brings should be on top of the priorities. For example, the more visitors the more opportunities for local people to do business such as selling food, souvenir or renting a shared house, which helps them earn more money to improve the living standard. On the other hand, a more careful supervision and appropriate actions from local policies also play an important role to prevent the harmful actions to the environment from visitors.

In conclusion, the advantages that tourism brings to a country is unquestionable. However, to reduce the prejudice from local residents, the government should raise the visitor's awareness and have an appropriate punishment if any harmful action to the local habitat is detected.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39935064935 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04107450929 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6289121077 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.785714286 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0766677900645 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0256762188927 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277282893516 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0470556413635 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162005873765 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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