many people believe that overconsumption of refined sugar is a major problem in the world and should be regulated the same as tobacco and alcohol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, white sugar is eaten by millions of people, which is 100 times more than the past. A large number of individuals opine that consuming an excessive amount of white sugar leads to different diseases like obesity, high blood pressure. I completely agree that refined sugar should be regulated the same as cigarettes and liquor. I will discuss the reasons and solutions of overconsumption white sugar should be controlled in further ensuring paragraphs.
The higher amount of sugar products leads to a lower quality of life and many diseases. To explain this, millions of people consume junk-food candies and chocolates which has an excessive amount of sugar level, which increases the glucose and cholesterol level in the blood, which creates obesity, diabetes high blood pressure, and heart-diseases. For example, recently I read an article which stated that 65% of people suffering from diabetes due to consuming higher amount of sugar. Furthermore, overconsumption of concentrated sugar also affects society. To illustrates this when a large proportion of the people suffering from sugar-related diseases which means higher the medical cost. As a result, affected people are not contributing their best to society.
There are many ways to control sugar products and concentrated sugar. Firstly, the government should make the law of age restriction as to the same tobacco and alcohol in order to safeguard children below 18. Secondly, the ministry of health should impose a higher tax on sugar and sugar-related products the same as cigarettes and liquor. For example, India times article stated that due to higher taxation on cigarettes and alcohol consumption of such products reduced drastically. Lastly, individuals should also take care of their health by own. A person knows their perfect diet than anyone else, so they should reduce the concentrated sugar in their daily diet.
In conclusion, consuming an excessive amount of refined sugar causes many diseases that are directly and indirectly affecting individuals and society as well. By imposing higher taxation, age-restriction law by the health ministry and self-care by the individual, overconsumption of concentrated sugar can be controlled.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
... which is 100 times more than the past. A large number of individuals opine that consuming an exc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51020408163 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01742088054 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495626822157 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6015012207 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232161742154 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874716738728 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698300199605 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150715079371 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388699849208 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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