Many people believe that playing games and watching TV programs is beneficial but others say it doesn’t improve mental ability of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Children's front-runners for leisure time nowadays are to sit in front of a screen playing video games or watching TV instead of spending time outside to socialize and play. The widespread of this issue has raised various concerns among the public, with many believing in the positivity of this trend while others suggest the opposite. In my opinion, I agree with the latter argument due to the detriments over-usage of electronic devices can have on an individual's health and social life, explained in the following paragraphs.
The first drawback of the mentioned entertainment is their absence in promoting the physical actions needed for a kid's normal development. Such inadequateness is because of the minimal movements required to use a handheld device, as designers want to maximize the efficiency of their leisure products, causing them to eliminate any possible "distractions" that can disrupt their customers' experiences. Therefore, youngsters with unregulated screen time can be glued to the screen for hours non-stop if left unchecked, leading to deterioration in their muscles due to the lack of practice, resulting in consequential effects on their fitness.
Moreover, excess time spent on these leisure choices can have negative impacts on the mental development of children. The reason for this is the sedentary lifestyle ensuing from over-allocating time to recreational activities, which can hazardously affect the growth of juveniles, particularly socially. This is achieved by hindering their abilities to develop the necessary social skills, for instance, teamwork and communication, on account of their sparse interaction with people, rendering them severely incomplete, as the lacking of these crucial cooperation skills can harshly impede their advancement in life. TV and computer games over-dwelling will consolidate these deficiencies, negatively influencing many aspects of children's life.
In conclusion, over-exposure to TVs and electronic games will have drastic consequences on the development of the youth. Parents or responsible people are heavily advised to control their children's gadgets usage.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ge of electronic devices can have on an individuals health and social life, explained in th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a kid' or simply 'kids'?
Suggestion: a kid; kids
...omoting the physical actions needed for a kids normal development. Such inadequateness...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76340694006 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34942098632 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5043064884 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.25 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1158358478 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461956278571 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480718371095 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745239052419 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052171107879 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.2 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ge of electronic devices can have on an individuals health and social life, explained in th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a kid' or simply 'kids'?
Suggestion: a kid; kids
...omoting the physical actions needed for a kids normal development. Such inadequateness...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76340694006 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34942098632 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5043064884 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.25 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1158358478 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461956278571 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480718371095 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745239052419 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052171107879 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.2 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.