Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it They argue that this leads to a more satisfying working life To what extent do you agree with this view learning is not the only path but they need to consider themselve What other th

Essay topics:

Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. They argue that
this leads to a more satisfying working life.
To what extent do you agree with this view? => learning is not the only path -> but they need to consider themselve
What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life? -> find a suitable company -> passion.

Write a well-developed essay to an educated reader to express your idea on the issue.

These days, many people claim that planning on a career path early in their lives and following because they think they can have more satisfied on their working life. Personally, I do not completely agree with this idea. I will explain the reasons why and recommend other things that can drive people’s working life that has more rewarding in the following paragraphs.

I have to admit that studying is not the only path to have a pleasing job but it does not mean going into a career path early is the best choice. Firstly, many people just think that having a high salary job can make them feel satisfied. However, they do not consider the career that they choose might not be suitable and brings them happiness when working or not. It leads to many people becoming tired and quitting their job. Next, sometimes deciding early can drive them to have a wrong decision, maybe they are too young to deeply understand what career suits them and be needed for society to look the job. In case, many people have enough understanding and knowing that they decide on a career path is not the main reason but having more reasons like chasing their dream. I believe that decision might be a good choice.

To my best knowledge, I claim that we have more things that can help our working lives become more rewarding than the idea was mentioned. For instance, people can think carefully about their passion and persevering to chase, after then helping them do not feel tired because choosing wrong a job that they do not like. The right job that satisfies your passion and dream will lead you to a pleasing working life.

To conclude, I disagree with this view. However, if many people consider carefully and being responsible with their decision, I also think following a career path early might be the right way to give a satisfying working life.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...them do not feel tired because choosing wrong a job that they do not like. The right ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, then, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70679012346 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3078392841 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0801548766 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408488168147 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141900115736 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782417901543 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268541126969 0.151304729494 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746906184079 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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