Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing.
Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Dangerous / Risky activities are now becoming quite popular and many people start engaging in these risky sports, for example, hang-gliding and mountain climbing. People participate in these extreme sports for several reasons. Despite the arguments against this practice, I believe this is a good trend.
There are reasons that more and more people are being attracted to extreme activities. First, people who are adventurous for example, climbing enthusiasts, take part in these activities as their hobby. They are always willing to try new things to challenge themselves and explore the limits of human abilities. The second reason that intense sports such as hang-gliding and mountain climbing become popular is that people are seeking a solution to reduce the stress after long hours of working. They want to have an invigorating experience which can be found in these dangerous activities. For example, people travel to the mountains not only to enjoy the view and relax but also to join in the activities such as bungee jumping, hang-gliding or even hiking in the jungles to experience new things.
However, I personally believe this is a good trend since such activities provide benefits not only for national economics but also for local people. Activities such as hang-gliding and mountain climbing are closely related to the tourism business which contributes to the economy of many developing nations. Consequently, profits will grow as the tourism’s service sectors grow as a result from higher demand for these activities. Furthermore, these extreme activities should be supported as it also ameliorates local living standards in terms of enhancing employment opportunities. Ha Long bay in Vietnam is a good example since it(comma splice error) has many dangerous caves, it requires a huge labor who familiar with the region not only to construct facilities to operate the business but also to organize and guide the tours. Therefore, it provides jobs for local people with a generous salary.
In conclusion, people take part in many extreme activities not only because of their interests but also to escape from working pressure. , I believe that extreme sports should be a good trend as it provides benefits for the whole economy as well as for local residents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30410958904 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82905966965 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512328767123 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0611332526 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.882352941 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267767881679 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086699836322 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049196572833 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186707055007 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395999537696 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.