Many people now undertake extreme activities; from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think is a good trend?Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or e

Every now and then, many are of the opinion that the risk of adventurous activities is the great method to help them overcome challenges and fear. Playing dangerous sports is becoming increasingly popular. In this essay,I will discuss some of the reasons why people would like challenge themselves by this way and also provide my own opinion in favor of this trend with some relevant examples.
The rise in recent extreme activities has been strongly linked to the need of ego satisfaction. In other words, the difficulty and pressure of daily life urges them to change and experience new things. Many scientists have made the case that many dangerous things and appealing games tend to attract people especially youth in irresistible way. They extremely desire to experience these outdoor activities not only have memorable moments and but also show up themselves. A lot of tourists attraction build up risky activities for people passionate in travelling, which would make their travel colorful and meaningful. Thus, young generation often book a tour with hang-gliding from mountain so that they can observe the whole scenery in very high level and lift their mood up.
Personally, I consider that this is a good trend. The main reason that many people including myself think that these dangerous games have benefits because thrilling games force us step out of our comfort zones, more self-confident, outgoing and more mature. In addition, accompanied with innovative and competitive technology, nowadays people can totally ensure the safe and quality of facilities, As a result, local people and tourists don't have to worry about unexpected case. It can be clearly seen that the benefits are outweigh drawbacks.
To sump up, undertaking these thrilling outside activities is good for both external and internal systems if we know the proper places where guarantee us from accidents.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, thus, in addition, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24752475248 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76242158229 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656765676568 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1188300807 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23809146103 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655461435601 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499939143846 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12671067925 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026862098608 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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