many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities
-causes
-advantages outwieugh?
Migrating to city is popular among youngsters wanting to study or work. This is due to minimum workfoce and low-qualified education offered in rural area, while in cities, migrants will see personal development and distinctive cultures
The main concern for migrating is unsustainable development in village such as in labour and university, as population and access in this area are low, chance to grow is limited. Thus, young villagers choose to live in cities for its larger work opportunity and better education, which intention to return building their mother place. For example, according to Lebak government survey, 50% of youngsters in Lebak, Banten, pursue their next education whether in Jakarta or bandung (city in Indonesia), and this is because only two universities are built in Banten Province, which predicated C, so migrating to cities which have A predicated university is opted by the youngsters.
By migration, learning and surviving solo in developed cities, young people could obtain self-growth and broad culture acknowledgment. Although they will understand theirself and other heritage, it may affect stress due to barrier in the city hustle that pressuring. However, great stress management can handle that matter. A neat example is how most immigrants in ABC company, Jakarta, has a great position in workforce like being directurs or managers, even though they were ordinary villagers in their birth place. This is because they learn how to control themself in uncertainity occured in daily life as immigrants, being tolerance to that distinguish culture.
In conclusion, a mass migration to urban city by young civiliants arises because of the lack in workplace and education. Immigrants in cities could gain self-improvement and diversed-culture understanding, and it is suggested to learn stress management
- The graph below gives the results of a survey showing what 1000 young people did after leaving school between 2008 and 2012 69
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to stress'
Suggestion: to stress
...rstanding, and it is suggested to learn stress management
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52650176678 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11419904835 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621908127208 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.7318271766 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.181818182 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172578148723 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631255408455 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050140556592 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103685374537 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337296002496 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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