Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than about famous people in the history of their country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people’s interest in famous people in the history of their country?
Nowadays, most youngsters have a tendency to have deep knowledge about celebrities instead of historic people in their own country. The reason for such an issue, in my point of view, is rather surprising.
I deem that due to the massive trend of idolism, fans, especially young people would like to have an insight into their idol. Therefore, they spend much time getting a sense of what the movie stars dressed or how much do those costs cause people to want to imitate famous people on styles and fashion. Because of that, less attention is paid to famous people in their history. Furthermore, it can be seen that history is not an interesting subject for the young. For example, in 2016, less than one-third of Vietnamese students chose history for the national graduation examination. this is an illustration of the reason why youngsters know merely nothing about historical people. this leads to the demand for a resolution for the issue.
So as to increase awareness of the young related to famous people in the country's history, I suggest that the government can promote this through films or movies that broadcast on TV. For instance, chinese moviemakers integrate the historical elements including the events and notorious people to chinese dramas such as the Empress of China whose plot is about the only woman in chinese history that ruled the country in the past. Another solution is that singers can use historical material for the songs. In such a method, teenagers can listen to their favorite celebrities and still, get a glimpse of historic people.
In conclusion, it is not easy to change the situation in a short period. it requires time for the young to adopt and acquire knowledge regarding the history of the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, regarding, so, still, therefore, third, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9693877551 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64351369461 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557823129252 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1555801703 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390385284918 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113982930663 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081834361009 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207099455987 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102227743046 0.056905535591 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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