Modern children are suffering from the disease that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes ad what solutions can be offered?
In this temporary era, adolescents have several ailment tribulations that are supposed to be suffered by adults. In accordance with this, obesity is one of the instances of the diseases that which are common for juveniles. In regard to this statement, this essay will explain the contributing factors of this issue and also put forward a number of remedial measures for it.
According to the previous argument, the development of globalisation in this era rendered numerous benefits and drawbacks for all individuals across the globe, such as the problem that I have written above. I firmly believe that there are several causative factors of this challenge. It, first and foremost, is caused by the lack of monitoring of the adults to the children, specifically, monitoring for consuming food, since they are not being controlled properly, youngsters suffer various ailments that are not common for them in earlier times. Furthermore, it, additionally, is produced by the increasing number of the food which is not cooked properly and consisted by perilous ingredients.
Regarding to the counter measures of two tribulations above, older people, firstly, have to increase the managing time of taking care of juveniles in order to create fewer negative impacts later. Secondly, the authority of every nation has to make a strict regulation of each food which has to be consisted by healthy ingredient and has to be cooked properly.
By way of conclusion, it seems to me that the negative influence which was created of this issue is able to be countered by several solutions. Thus, in order to make it happen, we, as adults, have to support our government law which focused on healthy food and have to maintain each meal that adolescents are going to consume.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, such as, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12110726644 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88964836055 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56401384083 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.5655505533 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.545454545 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137322224534 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528606294982 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547401435609 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801993860047 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410481644507 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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