As rate of crime dramatically increased in last decades, significant amount of offences have been caused by teenagers and this tendency seems to continue. This trend is mainly due to lack of after school activities and negative impact of violence in computer games and movies. However, there are a number of measures that can be implemented to resolve the issue of juvenile crime.
In the past, after school, have had a several activities to do. With nowhere presented shopping centres, easily accessible bars and pubs they mostly spent their free time with their counterparts at playground, woods or landscapes, therefore, they had been fully entertained. Modern children, instead of hanging out with their friends, prefer to occupied mall's carparks where followed their older friends experiencing range of minor crimes such as pickpocketing, robbing cars. These minor crimes lead to the craving for something more, owning this, they could be brave enough to offend a person and harm him. Furthermore, computer games become more violet as well as movies shows that committed crime does not lead to serious consequences. Not only juveniles can be mislead, but also they will be more likely try to copy their movie idol.
However, I believe, that there are some solutions to reduce a number of offences committed by children. Firstly, children should be more involved into the sport activities. Undoubtedly sport is healthy, but also makes body to produce hormones of happiness, nevertheless, children will not have time to commit a crime. Secondly, alcohol and illegal substances are easily accessible for many of young ones. It is well known that alcohol breaks a barriers of fear and boost courage. Not until authorities and police force hardly punish personnels supplying alcohol and illegal substances to minors, will be still easily abused by them. Lastly, lack of attention from parents owning to their busy schedule is definitely another factor of juvenile crime. Hence, parents should find the time to spent with the family and listen their children needs, problems and wishes.
In conclusion, only when children became more entertain and have more attention from their guardians, will the problem of juvenile crime be resolved.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'activity'?
Suggestion: activity
... past, after school, have had a several activities to do. With nowhere presented shopping ...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a barrier' or simply 'barriers'?
Suggestion: a barrier; barriers
...s. It is well known that alcohol breaks a barriers of fear and boost courage. Not until au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29131652661 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66226421427 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593837535014 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7797951071 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.944444444 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173761810174 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548248876227 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524407438389 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119496209297 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337045525325 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.