More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people think a solution can be to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are controversies surrounding whether escalating the price of calorific food for reduction in the rate of obesity should be followed or not. From my own perspective, I fervently advocate this sentiment due to the limitation in the consumption.
Admittedly, the ineffectiveness is the ground why some people disagree with this suggestion. Strikingly, the potential customers who often use fat foods are inclined to get used to eating them. Therefore, they may find it difficult to give up notwithstanding the augmentation which makes them find ways to continue consuming those foods. For example, KFC fried chicken stores in Vietnam have increased their prices five times in a recent decade. Especially, its sales have not decreased, on the contrary, it has increased eight times since 2014.
By contrast, I lean forward to the benefit of implementing higher cost because of the restriction in the consumption. It is perceptible that the growth in greasy food cost means the amount of money spent per serving will increase compared to normal. As a result, numerous people who do not have prosperous income may be adversely affected when they cannot afford to buy and consume much. Consequently, this policy can reduce the frequency of using fatty food. Take the UK as an example, after 1 year of increasing the price of soft drinks, the amount of sugar consumed from sugary drinks decreased by 10% as well as reducing the number of obese girls aged 10-11 by 8% in 1 year.
In conclusion, albeit the issue about the effectiveness of this suggestion,, I believe that it should be done to cut down on the proportion of overweight people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
...out the effectiveness of this suggestion,, I believe that it should be done to cut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04044117647 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99442379329 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.680147058824 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2819334962 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.461538462 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161984953454 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503767167095 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408856492287 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829402201631 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266419872439 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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