The graph shows Japanese average monthly salary Yen from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white television and color television during the same period

Given is the line graph contrasting the number of money which Japanese received monthly during 30 years from 1953 and comparing with the price of color TV and black-white TV.
Perceptibly, the salary must be paid for the Japanese was going up. the negative was truth for price of TV. The price of black and white TV was lower than color TV.
In the first of 10 years, the salary of Japanese was 18 thousand yens at 1953 jump to 21 thousand yens at 1963, the cost of black and white TV was slump down from 110 thousand to 40 thousand yens, while the price of color TV was appeared and paid at 100 thousands yens at 1963.
In the next 10 years, the japanese salary was up to 30 thousand yens, there was a breakpoint at 25 thousand yens. The black and white TV was cheaper than 13 thousand yens and the color TV was more expensive than 30 thousand yens.
In the ten final years, the money was paid for japanese was push up to 68 thousand yens, while the drop down value was 49 thousand of color TV and 20 thousand yens of black and white TV.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Given is the line graph contrasting the number of...
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... for price of TV. The price of black and white TV was lower than color TV. In th...
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...while the price of color TV was appeared and paid at 100 thousands yens at 1963. ...
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...s, there was a breakpoint at 25 thousand yens. The black and white TV was cheaper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 843.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.215 4.92477711251 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12705782714 2.65546596893 80% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0956681507 43.030603864 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.375 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.23603664747 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194931086248 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118326137226 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724303452519 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150060323307 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704526213572 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 88.4 61.2550243902 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.1 10.3012195122 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 11.4140731707 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.3 8.06136585366 78% => OK
difficult_words: 18.0 40.7170731707 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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