More and more people are spending a large amount of money to make their appearance look younger? Why do people want to look younger? Do you think it will be bring positive or negative development?
Due to rapid progression in technologies is introducing a new methods, products and techniques which provide younger looks to humans as compared with past. However, a majority of people are expanding a vast amount of wealth on these techniques to look smaller comparing with their original age. People have great wishes to look young because it’s modern phenomena to illustrates ourself smarter and attractive as well as some job sectors given preference to smart personalities. In my perception it’s negative establishment as it causes of many harmful diseases and wastage of wealth.
The main factors of this notion is that today’s world full with competitions and everyone tries to beat each others so that is why a lots of masses give priority to new methods and products which offer them younger appearances because their aim to attract lots of humans upon their beauties and personalities. In addition to this, nowadays many job fields required attractive looks and beautiful faces rather than talents and knowledge as well as more companies judged a candidates by their looks not talent and education. So that is the reason people given preference to utilise huge wealth on these things. Even though, a majority of advertising which published in magazines, newspapers and etcetera related to beauty treatments influenced humans to make themselves younger. For example, a survey conducted by newspaper in 2018, reported that 7 out of 10 masses expanding a most part of their income on such treatments to look smaller with their original periods.
Nevertheless, in my prospective it is a dark development because it has reasons of many perilous ailments. Moreover, a vast amount of people apply a variety of beauty cosmetics on their skin sometimes due to these products people suffers from side effects as well as some beauty creams have cause of skin cancer. Furthermore, in present times a large groups of humans is doing surgery on their various body parts but which sometimes creates reactions and side effects for them. For instance, Ayesha takiya a famous Indian Bollywood actress who did surgery of her nose but it surgery was not suitable for her after this operation her nose looked so ugly and it was responsible to damage her filmy career . Apart from this, people thrift more and more amount of their income to make appearance look younger but it is wasting of money because these money should be better spend to full fill other needs.
In conclusion, although humans expand huge wealth on beauty cosmetics, surgeries and treatments to look younger but it is harmful for their bodies and creating so many detrimental disease for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'method'?
Suggestion: method
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...ries to beat each others so that is why a lots of masses give priority to new methods ...
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Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y their looks not talent and education. So that is the reason people given preference t...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'group'?
Suggestion: group
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s responsible to damage her filmy career . Apart from this, people thrift more and...
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Line 9, column 842, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
...nger but it is wasting of money because these money should be better spend to full fill oth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15137614679 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76988086333 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52752293578 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4128252855 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.733333333 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0666666667 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29442628427 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095383776623 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823376393466 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171855169543 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597612225525 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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