More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reasons for this? is this a positive or negative development?
In this modern world, the phenomenon of obtaining a number of items like cars or clothes manufactured by well-known enterprises remains a source of controversy. There are several reasons for this and I am convinced that this is a negative trend.
Becoming an owner of luxury products is deemed to be the culprit of the willingness to showing off one’s property. To be specific, some riches are ambitious to create a shining image of their personal life by wasting a huge of money on those up-to-date garments or the limited edition of cars or jewelry, for example, which presumably caters for the purposes of retrieving recognition and compliment from others. Additionally, teenagers at adolescent age are prone to imitate their famous celebrities whose appearance is normally accompanied with renowned brands of clothes, thereby the likelihood of purchasing for items to become a substitute of younger adults’ idols increases accordingly.
Personally, I reckon that this phenomenon potentially exerts adverse effects. Pursuing this extravagant trend of wasting money is an act grappling against cost-effectiveness. As a result, some owners inevitably have to shoulder the burden of finance in order to fulfill the need of possessing up-to-date models as well as meet their fundamental demands like eating or accommodating in this competitive world. Moreover, the phenomenon is likely to render the gap between the wealthy and the poor more significant. While a huge amount of money is wasted in exchange for recognition, people with meager incomes have to risk their lives to earn a living. Those expenditures can be efficiently allocated in other aspects of life like education or medical services in order to spur the standard of life.
In short, the proliferation of owning famous brands of products is attributable to the owners’ desire while I am of the opinion that it is not a wise choice to neglect the shortcomings of this trend
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 482, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...olescent age are prone to imitate their famous celebrities whose appearance is normally accompanie...
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Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o neglect the shortcomings of this trend
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, i reckon, in short, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15227577122 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.457842149 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264261941813 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088339571494 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736083533405 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160915937784 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076367128457 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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