The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

After busy working hours people usually find out several ways to unwind and escape from hustle and bustle of the daily life that is one of the reasons why music was born. Moreover, Music not only is an intertenment methods but also it’s a tool to inspire for someone.
So,while I accepted this given notion I stil belive that music could be support people to develop their gifted .Therefore, some reasons for my inclination are articulated in trailed paragraphs.
We couldn’t refuse some merits in listening music that is a great way to temporarily forgot all the pressures and worries from daily work and relax our mind. Nowaday, we have a lots of channels to listen music such as zingmp3 , sportify, imuz and so forth. I often use spotify app to enjoy music after long day that make me reduce stress after a long day.
In the other hand,symphony also inspire and show strongly of contries such as a athem song or the piano songs help people more concentrace on their study or their work. My sister is a case in point,she is a designer in a nation company whenever she need to have ideas to design she usually listening music and she said that it a geat way for her to find out new ideal. In addition, Music also connects people on around the world close together and display the culturals charactetistics in each contry.
In conclusion, although the best role of music is that make people happier everyday and remove stress, it’s a helpful method to support people more and more successful and closer.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lso it’s a tool to inspire for someone. So,while I accepted this given notion I stil bel...
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Line 2, column 3, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
... it’s a tool to inspire for someone. So,while I accepted this given notion I stil bel...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e support people to develop their gifted .Therefore, some reasons for my inclinati...
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Line 2, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...support people to develop their gifted .Therefore, some reasons for my inclination are ar...
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Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...rk and relax our mind. Nowaday, we have a lots of channels to listen music such as zin...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...channels to listen music such as zingmp3 , sportify, imuz and so forth. I often us...
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Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , symphony
...ess after a long day. In the other hand,symphony also inspire and show strongly of contr...
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Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e and show strongly of contries such as a athem song or the piano songs help peop...
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Line 4, column 197, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , she
...their work. My sister is a case in point,she is a designer in a nation company whene...
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Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...le of music is that make people happier everyday and remove stress, it’s a helpful metho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7030075188 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50951981177 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612781954887 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0136817475 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.1 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156843485552 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610827115706 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353815553675 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898881159154 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029526669532 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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