In this day and age, due to the development of technological equiments, there has been recorded a change in children's free-time habits. As far as I concerned, this dilemma have the merits surpassed the demerits, so, this essay will disuss both sides and provide my final conclusion.
There are several drawbacks for this phenomenon. First of all, as a part of 4. 0 industrial era, more and more youngsters spedn their free time on suffering the Internet and social network apps. For instance, teenagers all around the world usually go on Facebook or Instagram in order to waste their time and stay in touch with their friends. However, these activities might harm children such as becoming the victim of the Internet or suffering from mental health issues. Furthermore, the green screen of laptops or smartphones also affect children in many ways, especially vision problems. Thus, youngsters might have weak eys and it is prdeicted almost children is short-sighted at the moment. In addition, young generations might have adverse impacts after using modern equipments for a long period.
In contrast, I would aruge that the advantages are more vital and attractive. To begin, if kids have opportunities to get update as soon as possible, they can completely expand their general knowledge and find interest in social medias. So, parents also have chances to explore and understand their children deeper and give an advice related to their future careers for offsprings early. Moreover, contacting with friends through mass medias will help introverts to express their feelings as well as emotions without scaring or bothering anyone. It is believed that teenagers are now have a faster brain than adults, so, it is neccessary to let them join in some e-organization to improve soft skills and have a chance to communicate with other peers. So that children might expand their social cirlce and parents donnot need to worry about their kids' autism rate. For example, WAVE is a common organsation, which has opened online for several years, to teach generation Z about social skills during summer. Thus, this dilemma brings benefits to both parents and the young.
To conclude, having mentioned both sides of the argument, parents should be recommeded to guide offsprings how to use the Internet as regard as new techonologies smartly to acheive benefits in the near future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 387.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15762273902 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72171660076 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617571059432 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6906980599 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.052631579 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231317578936 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610609802882 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537958285095 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125439362587 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381371788488 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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