These days the number of famous people on the internet are growing up every day. As a matter of fact, being famous and having a lot of followers is an attractive lifestyle for younger people. but this popularity can make a lot of money and some times power for this person and even make him or her much more money than a politician. in this writing, I want to discuss why celebrities can peak this level and is it a good thing for society or not?
popularity is the main and most important thing to become a celebrity, and when someone being such popular, they can affect others much easier than a politician. as a result, they become the best opportunity to affect people. These effects could be a new political idea or advertising a new brand that can make a lot of money for them.
Another reason that makes them rich is tv shows or festivals are invite them as a gust to absorb visitors as much as possible. so when celebrities go to a tv show their followers also would watch this program and make more spectators for that show.
finally, although celebrities are famous know and popular in the world but most of them are not special or smart people. as a result, we see a changing type of role model in the world. instead of smart people with a bright mind and good skills, we have just rich people without any skill. so I think maybe make this kind of people popular and rich will not have a good effect on society in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e in internet are growing up every day. as matter of fact being famous and having ...
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...g famous and having alot of follower is a atractive life style for younger people...
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...tractive life style for younger people. but this popularity can make alot of mony a...
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...r her much more mony than a politician. in this weiting i want to disguss why cele...
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...mony than a politician. in this weiting i want to disguss why celebrities can pea...
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... is it a good thing for socity or not? popularity is the main and most important thing to...
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...o become a celebritie, and when someone being such popular, they can effect other muc...
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...uch popular, they can effect other much more easier than a politician. as a result they bec...
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...her much more easier than a politician. as a result they become the best oppertuni...
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...her much more easier than a politician. as a result they become the best oppertuni...
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...e the best oppertunity to affect people.This effects could be new political idea or ...
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...which can make a lot of mony for them. other resean that make them rich is tv shows ...
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...to absorb visitors as much as possible. so when a celebrities go to a tv show thei...
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...b visitors as much as possible. so when a celebrities go to a tv show their followers also wo...
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...and make more specrator for that show. finally, altough celebriteis are famous know an...
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...have just rich people witout any skill. so i think maybe make this kind of people ...
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...e just rich people witout any skill. so i think maybe make this kind of people po...
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...ich will not have good effect on socity in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, i think, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1137.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42412451362 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35862507297 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568093385214 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8841016112 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.7 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154219047861 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677286240121 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670922327027 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944512122305 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644480870354 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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