There is a growing number of older people, in our modern life, residing in retirement communities with others rather than living with their family members. Although this trend can bring several benefits in certain aspects, I believe it might be a detrimental development.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some elderly individuals choose to live with others instead of with their adult children. First, it would be happier for them to live with those of the same age. many retirement communities, in fact, often only permit people over 65 age to reside, which allows the elderly to connect with others and share their preferences effortlessly, bringing a sense of community. Second, some do not want to become a burden to their family when they are unable to take care of themselves. If they live in nursing homes, they can take advantage of care services to assist them, which not only brings a sense of convenience but also improves their health substantially.
On the other hand, I would contend that living in retirement communities can have adverse effects on society as a whole. One obvious drawback is that it puts a great strain on not only social welfare but also healthcare services. Indeed, since most nursing homes are free for the elderly if there are too many people, the government has to establish more infrastructure and invest more funds in it, which may cause a deficit in government coffers, reducing welfare for another purpose. Furthermore, it can contribute to the generation gap. If adult children do not live with their grandparents, they tend not to be friendly to the elderly due to their ability to understand, which can loss of family and generation affection.
In conclusion, it seems that there are both positive and negative aspects to the elderly living in retirement homes, however, I still believe that the pitfalls can overshadow the benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...hem to live with those of the same age. many retirement communities, in fact, often ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, as to, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0126984127 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80133143307 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549206349206 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6646581629 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.461538462 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379675038222 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128053617931 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127425408392 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216739596565 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767439878455 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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