Nowadays sports are a big business, with professional player earning high salary and a lot of companies involve both financially and in other ways. Is this the negative or positive development for sports?
It is true that nowadays commercialization has become a part of the modern game. While the development of this business may have many benefits, I firmly believe that overall the drawbacks are more significant.
There are several advantages of expanding the aspect of sport business. Sportsmen, at least who are play popular items, are now ensured a steady income. In the olden days, many sports athletes cannot afford their life. This help sportsman focus on training process. Besides, the development of sports business also get the reputation for the country. Many companies sponsor games, matches, events to promote their products by giving advertisement through the game. For example, sponsor offering free quality dresses, playing equipment which is named their logos to attract more customers.
Despite the positive effects mentioned above, I contend that the negative consequences of the improvement of this business are greater. Firstly, since sports are a big business, many companies may pump in millions of dollars in this field, which lead to the imbalance in the development of country. There might be lack investment in other aspects such as travel and food industry. Furthermore, the development of sports business might also lead to the imbalance in the job market. People might not choose to become doctors, teachers or engineers who are often paid less in some countries. They might cannot afford for their basic standard of living.
In conclusion, although sport business has several benefits, I believe that it likely to have more harmful on the development of economy in our countries.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... of sport business. Sportsmen, at least who are play popular items, are now ensured a s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35294117647 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79391880957 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0785051053 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3125 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9375 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226369064282 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704254755674 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056063713743 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12349055213 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478484230691 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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