Nowadays, sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sportspeople and companies involved both financially and other ways. Is this a positive or negative development for sports?
These days, sports have been invested increasingly by private organizations in various forms such as money, sports equipment and so forth. From that, elite sports athletes can make a great deal of salary than before as sports have become a lucrative business. In my perspective, this development brings both positive and negative impacts, and this essay will discuss them.
To begin with, when sports grow a profitable industry and earning is the only goal, a number of illegal actions will arise like gambling or match-fixing. In fact, large sums of money effortlessly lure some sports players into criminal activities in matches and that would ruin the primary value of sports. For example, VietNam National Football team scandal in SEA Games 23, 7 players of the team took part in betting and arrange the score. Secondly, when professional players receive a huge level of wage, this means that they own a mentality have to win in tournaments they participate in. Therefore, in order to win or to receive incredible monetary awards, a few sportsmen resort to illegal performance-enhancing drugs. Chinese swimmer Sun Yang who has been accused of applying prohibited drugs in his competitions is a particular example.
On the other hand, developing sports in the professional direction requires a huge investment, however, sports are not the major concern of governments compared to other social issues. Hence, funding from private firms is indispensable for the growth of sports. Since the HAGL, a prosperous business group in Vietnam, allocated billions of Vietnam Dong to the construction of a sports institute where trains young football talents. Besides, with the appearing of commercial enterprises also helps to promote economic development. Brands can apply the image of famous athletes to advert theirs produces to encourage people to buy them.
In conclusion, with the reasons aforementioned above, I believe that when sport becoming a type of business, it will produce beneficial and adverse effects. While well-trained athletes will have more financial incentives to improve their performance, a series of illegal profit-making activities can appear.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, hence, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42603550296 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04524544737 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659763313609 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.310712184 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26049982999 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693635353127 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578259389929 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144435203403 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590682550477 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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