Nowadays sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and other ways Is this a positive or negative development for sports

It is undeniable that sport is turning into a profitable business for professional sports players and sports companies. In my opinion, this situation has both positive and negative sides.

There are a few reasons why this is a positive development. First, the huge sport market spares sportspeople a space to be constantly motivated and competitive. To be more specific, sportspeople can consider earnings to be their motivation, which helps them concentrate on their career and reputation to win a high-paid sport contract. Second, in some developing countries, national sportspeople are not paid well enough for their hard work and dedication. The competitive sports market incentives the government to think twice about the salaries they pay for national sportspeople. For example, Vietnamese female soccer players are paid too poorly that they do not even have decent houses to live in. Therefore, the big sport business can provide them with better job opportunities.

However, every coin has two sides. There are some sportspeople who devoted too much of their time on the sport market instead of training themselves. For instance, a popular Vietnamese basketball player signed with too many sportswear brands last year that he could not pay attention to his basketball training sessions. Consequently, he was criticized very badly on various social media platforms. Moreover, he was banned from joining a worldwide basketball tournament.

In conclusion, sports becoming a huge market had both pros and cons. The government should provide some policies so the negative impact of this situation will not overweigh its positive impact.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49212598425 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00572180495 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622047244094 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7075506364 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1875 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349084191066 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102488850468 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925329144967 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226774577342 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136570009205 0.056905535591 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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