The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems, such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are blame for not looking after their children’s health? To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Certainly, it is generally known that health is wealth. In contrast, the presence of junk food in the world increase dramatically due to these young ones are suffering from various kinds of ailments and one of them is obesity. However, one section of society deems that availability of fast food places are responsible for these because these opens at very short distance and varieties of food whilst others blame progenitors the reasons is that they have busy workloads, never inspire offsprings to do daily physical activities as well. Moreover, I strongly accord with both the perceptions.
There are multifarious factors to support the former prospective and the main is that nowadays junk food places are opening at every and each corner of urban areas and ruler areas which perilous for young ones. In addition to this, these fast food outlets offering the varieties of cuisines as well as offers to children through the advertisements. Due to these, young ones are eating at outside on those places to satisfy the taste buds. Moving further, children’s intake over consumption of these food items as a result they become overweight the reason is that they are immature and not able to decide what is right for them. For example, in British regions, the proportion of fat children who are 14 years old are more as compared with others because they eat a vast amount of junk foods in a single day.
The another reason to take side of second notion is that today parents have hectic schedule and they both busy in their work to earn more bread and butter for their families. Additionally, they have never any time to prepare food at home so that is why they give wealth to their offspring to eat in restaurants, cafeteria and etcetera. Furthermore, offering spend these money to consume fast food cousins. Similarly, progenitors never keep eagle eyes on the eating habits of their children which lead to so many complications related children’s health and they become obese. Even though, mothers and fathers are not provide enough time to motivate their offspring for outdoor activities and regular exercise which crucial and beneficial for young ones. For instance, parents are role models for their offspring and every children’s want to be like their guardians. Apart from this, they teach everything at first from home. So that is why they doing same what is their parents doing.
In conclusion, although, parents play an essential role in the development of offspring,so it is necessary for them to provide proper care on the health of their children, but fast food outlets have also duties to serve healthier cuisines to young ones because children are the future and pillars of nations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: provided
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, similarly, so, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 452.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04203539823 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68311301767 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519911504425 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7311323171 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.611111111 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1111111111 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242561404139 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795282577617 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544877881607 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15884855464 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384575403754 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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