Obesity is now a major global epidemic What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem

Nowadays the major problem faced by both young and elderly people worldwide is obesity. It may be either due to diet we follow or from heredity. Apart from the causes of the obesity it has adverse effects on people who are suffering it. Something should be done to counterfeit this problem.

The first thing, if we consider the diet issues obesity results mainly from intake of junk and fast foods. Even though we all know about the negative impact of those foods we could not avoid them because of its lip smacking taste and rich appearance. The truth behind that is attracting artificial colors and aromas which leads to malfunctioning of our hormones which can be a cause of obesity. Even some of the researchers state that those substances may also lead to cancer and other dangerous diseases.

The second thing to be discussed is heredity. Although some people follow proper and healthy diet they will have obesity because of genetic problems. The grandparents genetic problems would be transmitted and causing obesity.

Many nutrition and health care centre are available to tackle this problem. They are providing health drinks and nutritionally balancing diets for their patrons to ease the problem. But still most of them are not getting desired results. In my opinion the best way to eradicate this problem is to follow healthy diet from the childhood days. Because what kind of diet we follow from the beginning would have greater impact on our health. But the heredity problems causing obesity can be treated with the advancements in technology and we hope anything can be possible with recent innovations in science.

Votes
Average: 7.7 (4 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'apart from', 'even so', 'kind of', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248275862069 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.168965517241 0.155533422707 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0896551724138 0.0946595960268 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0344827586207 0.0501214627716 69% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0620689655172 0.0437548338989 142% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.113793103448 0.122226691241 93% => OK
Participles: 0.051724137931 0.0403226058552 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54872235022 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0310344827586 0.0326793684256 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0931034482759 0.0861772015684 108% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0344827586207 0.021408717616 161% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0137931034483 0.011925033212 116% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1675.0 1933.35771543 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 316.048096192 86% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15808823529 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.382352941176 0.374742101984 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272058823529 0.28420135186 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176470588235 0.203846283523 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106617647059 0.137316102897 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54872235022 2.80594681477 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.037074148 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595588235294 0.56093040696 106% => OK
Word variations: 63.4035743049 60.7387585426 104% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.7743622355 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9503850017 49.517814964 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5294117647 127.492653851 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7743622355 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.814263465372 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.99599198397 225% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.2058823529 49.1944974215 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.55844155844 1.69124875643 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212027302493 0.332605444948 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.082626679628 0.102741220458 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0802603613842 0.0668466124924 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488237517854 0.534860350844 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107443112852 0.148594505496 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923827460897 0.134430193775 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759170303345 0.0742795772207 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.292343054766 0.324371583561 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0304011823657 0.0638462369009 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153039666994 0.228012699653 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556497940911 0.058150111329 96% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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