Obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food could reduce the problem. DO you think this will be possible?
In recent years, an increasing number of people, especially those in industrialized countries, are getting obese. Although several individuals think that imposing a tax on junk food could tackle the issue, I believe that there are other measures that can play important roles as a taxable introduction in this case.
To begin with, since introducing a tax can increase the price of products, this solution may discourage people from consuming too much junk food. As a result, the level of obesity can be minimized. However, if the tax is too high for a long time, some businesses are not likely to survive, which can exert a negative impact on the national economy. Furthermore, in addition to fast food, other causes such as leading a sedentary life or consuming a few vegetables and fruits but too much sugar-based drinks and food can also result in getting over-weight. Therefore, only tax introduction may be impossible to mitigate the problem in the long run.
In my opinion, incorporating other solutions such as raising people’s awareness and encouraging inhabitants to do more exercise with imposing a moderate amount of taxes may lead to a better result in improving people's health. To be more specific, firstly, governments should invest more in sports facilities or fitness suites to attract more clients. Secondly, office workers, who usually have a sedentary lifestyle, should be encouraged to take part in outdoor activities. For example, they will be rewarded by their companies one they take high places in a sportive competition. Additionally, regular campaigns about the effects of fast food or high sugar food and beverage on health deterioration and about the important roles of taking daily exercise on reducing obesity are necessary for raising awareness.
In conclusion, I believe that the incorporation of other measures with moderate tax imposing on fast food can lead to a better result in mitigating the problem of obesity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21587301587 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98492052941 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580952380952 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0355468603 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.384615385 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25966466737 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084423253362 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518548180166 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151982378501 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246118268449 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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