In this day and age, longevity is something which bears many consideration. Due to the evolution of society, the proportion of elderly people has significantly increased. Although it can contain lots of benefits, I individually believe that there are more demerits.
On the one hand, there are two social merits that long life span can offer for both seniors and their families. Firstly, for the elderly people, as they can enjoy the company of their beloved ones for much longer time, consequently, this would immensely load their times with pleasant moments leading to strengthening the bonds between family members. In addition, families would greatly benefit from the wisdom and experience of their senior members; they can seek their guidance throughout different life aspects. For instance, your grandparents can has help you a lot to take the crucial decisions in your life, such as how to be more confident to face with huge problems, be yourself and pursue your dreams, actualize it in the future, and listen to your heart to find someone you love and you want to be beside the whole life.
On the other hand, the disadvantages are seemed to outweigh advantages. The main downside of high life expectancy is that more people will be eligible for pension while the number of people in the working age declines. This tendency will place more burden on the shrinking workforce because they now have to pay higher tax to contribute to the government budget which is later allocated to other sectors. As a consequence, the young will get more stressed, leading to a fall in their productivity at work. A further disadvantage is that increased number of senior citizens means that there is greater demand for healthcare service. According to scientists, the rate of chronic diseases such as increasing cholesterol, CKD… in the old is the highest, and they brings excruciating pains. Until now, there are not the special medicine for cancer, so it is really hard for old people who get this diseases to live a normal life with happiness because they always have to face with difficulties, worry about tomorrow, and their life becomes so monotonous, they will lose the inspiration to live and don’t want to enjoy life any more. At that time, they will feel like they are dead even though they are still alive.
In conclusion, despite the positive impact on society in terms of tightening family bonds which means prolonging life of the elderly, I hold the notion that longevity has substantially dire impacts that outweigh the positive ones.
- The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country 82
- The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income To what extent do you agree or disagree 80
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun consideration seems to be countable; consider using: 'many considerations'.
Suggestion: many considerations
...age, longevity is something which bears many consideration. Due to the evolution of society, the p...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...tage is that increased number of senior citizens means that there is greater demand for ...
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Line 3, column 760, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...KD… in the old is the highest, and they brings excruciating pains. Until now, there ar...
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Line 3, column 889, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t is really hard for old people who get this diseases to live a normal life with hap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, really, so, still, then, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 425.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.712027804 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.8298539654 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.8125 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5625 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166473324958 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514132011919 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376285130483 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827586589542 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378725503974 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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