One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

Improving medical care would affect in the increasing of life expectancy and people live is also longer. Although it has positive and negative sides, in my point of view, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

Regarding the negative impacts, the better quality of medical care the higher governments' budget in health sector that will directly affect the increasing in tax we should pay. Additionally, rising life expectancy and live longevity would increase the number of elderly people. Unfortunately, the rising figures of old people does not provide the better productivity as elderly have to retire and do not have the ability to work.

In spite of the drawbacks, being life longer and having longer life expectancy would reduce the mortality, subsequently, the happiness scale of the country. This could be due to the elder generation would have more times to spent with their families and their grand children. The happier family the more productive they would be. Furthermore, they can share their experience to the younger so that they can apply it to their role in any sectors.

To sum up, despite having negative sides, a better medical care would provide the more benefits to the society and their quality of life.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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...he society and their quality of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, regarding, so, in spite of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1035.0 1615.20841683 64% => OK
No of words: 201.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14925373134 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63607424095 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557213930348 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 506.74238477 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4149667066 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243556598222 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108503354415 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126737931807 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170575786766 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10308585597 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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