It is discussed that there should be punishments issued for parents who let their kids gain more weights.I obviously disagree with the statement because some children inherit their parents gene and many parents have the misunderstanding that making their child fat is a good way.
Firstly,I would like to talk about the parents that have the superstition belief that making their kids weighty is an better way to become healthy.So,guardians give their children more calories food and food that contains more fat.Likewise,they also believe that it is also the best way to show how rich they are and to show that how healthy their children are.A recent research has shown that about 60 percentage of the parents in Nepal is likely to have illusion that making their kids obese is an healthy way.
Secondly,let's move to the children who have this obese problem due to their parental genes.A person’s risk of obesity is heavily influenced by the genes they inherit and the environment they live in. The combination of factors leads to childhood body mass index rising in line with parental weight, surveys have found. Previous work with twins shows that up to 70% of the differences between people’s fat mass is down to their DNA.
In conclusion,punishing parents would be a bad idea for making their children fat.As a parent,they will always think positive for their children.Rather than sentencing parents if there was an awareness programs held positively.This would be a good idea with dealing with the child obese problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15537848606 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07444806705 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553784860558 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 20.2975951904 202% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.557814918 49.4020404114 272% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 215.666666667 106.682146367 202% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 41.8333333333 20.7667163134 201% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413008550635 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205663926889 0.084324248473 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140081987099 0.0667982634062 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282727547668 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105895609835 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.8 13.0946893788 182% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.54 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 9.78957915832 281% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.1190380762 182% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.