In recent years, there is an increase in young population in some countries, which is recorded higher than the number of older people. In my opinion, this phenomenon has more benefits than drawbacks.
On the one hand, the population includes a wide range of young adults may place the education system under pressure causing financial burdens for the government. The number of young people increases will move in tandem with demands for the quantity and the quality of school schemes. This requires the government invest in constructing more schools, employing more trained teachers and improving the curriculums in order to meet the educational demand of its citizens. For example, Vietnam has recorded a rapid rise in the number of young adults exceeding the number of available schools that has created an educational crisis in recent years.
However, I believe that the young population growing in fast pace will contribute to developing the national economy because of providing a large number of labor forces. These people not only have abilities to access and apply new technologies which enhance work productivity in certain fields relating to science and automation but also reduce the lack of employee in these areas. In other words, an increase in the number of young adults couples with the development of the modern industry which stimulates the economy to develop besides raising living condition for its people. Take China as an example. Due to its abundant young labor, China has many technological inventions, particularly appliances, contributing vastly in growing exporting profits of these kinds of products. Thus, both the nation and the citizen will be received the advantages from young population growing trend.
In conclusion, although a large number of young adults in some countries can result in pressure on the education system, I strongly believe that the benefits from developing the economy it brings outstrips its drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32580645161 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76958544515 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3402600165 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280968403962 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954357728511 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617861386218 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172776869297 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134831690837 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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