At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large numbr of young adults, compared with the nmber of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, the number of younger age people has increased steadily in particular countries but some insist on this trend
may lead to the negative direction. Generally speaking, the rise in young children has an important impact on our community because it means the national economy will be flourished and the world will become more advanced due to a child's creativity.
While there are strong advantages of allowing juvenile people to inpour in society, there are also some downsides. For example, the more birth rate has been jumping, the expansive budget that government has to burden may be. Because the present state of the classroom cannot afford to these new children. Furthermore, the number of teachers is relatively small so that students are not able to be taught in the right condition.
Overall, however, I believe that young population has an essential role in making the nation more active. For example, when it comes to the financial aspect, the Britain economist say that if the working age population increases, the domestic market is also expected to be lively and the economy will grow several times. Plus, since the child's thinking is infinite, there may be a possibility to originate astonishing things. For instance, George Nissen, who invented trampoline at age 16 and next intelligent child is Cassidy Goldstein, designing crayon holders at age 12. Thus this makes it clear why we should not deny regarding good points of adolescents' swell.
For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the positives of expanding young population outweigh any demerits because if there are many creative young people, the nation will develop and achieve economic growth.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t that government has to burden may be. Because the present state of the classroom cann...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...in, designing crayon holders at age 12. Thus this makes it clear why we should not d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21611721612 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65996117848 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641025641026 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1358032607 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133209426519 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431699165851 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330052046211 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732335864922 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327945494033 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.