Prevention is better than cure.
Out of a country's health budget,a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
It's real fact that nowadays the government spend much money on treatment. Some people agree with this issue. However it's generally accepted that prevention is better than cure. The question is except country's health budget,should it be diverted a large proportion from treatment to spending health education and prevention or is it enough to pay attention merely on treatment?
To start with, I agree that most countries divert billion dollars for health education and preventative measures.There are several points: 1stly,if the government pay more attention and spend more money on health educ...
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Sentence: It's real fact that nowadays the government spend much money on treatment.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to It's and real
Description: The fragment government spend much is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace spend with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
There are several points: 1stly,if the government pay more attention
Description: The fragment government pay more is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace pay with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: Otherwise, the risk is those may spread all over the world.In addition,for some poor patients who have no sufficient money for treatment,the country should divert some money as an encouragement.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, plural
Suggestion: Refer to is and those
I'm totally agree that
I totally agree that
Sentence: 2ndly,after gaining healh education,human-beings know which things can appear diseases and what treatment can help to heal,as a result it brings to decrease the status of. sick people.
Error: healh Suggestion: heal
Sentence: Furthemore,to dissapear illnes may help to improve people's condition.
Error: dissapear Suggestion: disappear
Error: illnes Suggestion: illness
Sentence: This means that people spend their money on other useful things instead of diverting on treatment such as buying remidies or paying to doctors.On the other hand we shouldn't forget about treatment.
Error: remidies Suggestion: remedies
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
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Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 282 350
No. of Characters: 1427 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.098 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.239 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5