Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
IIt is true that some experts of medical and teaching fields have a lower income than celebrities. The difference is still argumentative. However, I think the society should pay musicians and teachers better for their contribution.
On the one hand, I believe that medical and teaching jobs should be paid a better income than entertaining jobs for some justifications. The first reason is that medicine and education are key factors contributing to the development of society, therefore, a shortage of employees in the two sectors will cause the imbalance of a country. As a result, the government should impose beneficial policies of income for people working in these fields in order to keep the labour source sufficiently. Besides, a lucrative salary will stimulate musicians and teachers to enhance their skills as well as create breakthroughs, benefiting the society in various aspects. For example, the Nobel prize, with a valuable reward can afford the expenditure of scientists when they do researchers and encourage them to put more effort into their professionals.
However, I think it is likely reasonable to pay an escalating income for celebrities. firstly, famous people draw a great attraction of the public, which facilitates for companies. As a result, businesses are willing to pay celebrities well with a purpose of hiring them to promote products. Another reason for this issue is that recreational activities also contribute to developing a country like other fields when it brings a huge amount of profit through tourism. In fact, some authorities use celebrities to represent the national identity, spreading the fame of the country out over the world. Therefore, the government need to give them plenty of money to acknowledge their contribution to the public.
In conclusion, I partly agree that medical and teaching jobs need paying higher than any works in the society because of the tremendous roles. However, it seems not reasonable when celebrities are paid well and the government need to consider the advantages of each field in order to have an appropriate support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...y an escalating income for celebrities. firstly, famous people draw a great attraction ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2776119403 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06857250596 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549253731343 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.014088039 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.875 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127264605157 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391017106805 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036544602502 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809364464398 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292396756193 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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