Q2 : Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue of young people's education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that secondary school students should be required to understake unpaid community service, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from obligatory voluntary activities for teenagers. Perhaps the principal benefit is being forced to participate in voluntary work enables pupils not only to feel a sense of belonging to our society but also to realise the importance of helping socially disadvantaged people. In addition, adolescents are capable of developing interpersonal skills that will be invaluable in their future career by partaking in mandatory volunteering. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, the majority of large companies have a predisposition to hire employees who are able to empathise with others.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that obligatory voluntary work merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that being obliged to attend volunteering can cause the youth to experience high levels of stress given that devotion to voluntary work deprives them of an opportunity to take part in leisure activities helping them unwind. Furthermore, mandatory charitable activities can exert a detrimental influence on students' academic performances given that commitment to these activities often prevents young people from revising for their exams. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47634069401 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02359307073 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4214696892 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148258393955 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448398966226 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458472850747 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816324832268 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537633887202 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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